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marita_c ([personal profile] marita_c) wrote2009-10-07 11:00 am

Before the Fall - chapter Index and conclusion


Prologue  | Chapter 1 | Chapter 2 Chapter 3  | Chapter 4  | Chapter 5 
Chapter 6 | Chapter 7  | Chapter 8  | Chapter 9 | Chapter 10




Chapter 11

It’s not stalking, exactly, what Jack is doing. It’s not like he’s sneaking up on Ianto — he’s simply looking for him. True, he could have just used his comm to ask Ianto where he was, but as Ianto’s still logged into the system, meaning  he’s still somewhere on the premises, Jack had thought it wouldn’t be that hard to find him.

Having no luck on the main floor, tourist’s office, cells and archives, Jack is more or less ready to either give up and call him or look for him on the CCTV, but then decides to try one more spot. Not hearing any sound of gunshots, he’d initially dismissed the shooting range, but as it turns out that’s where he eventually finds his target.

Ianto’s sitting, or more precisely straddling, a wooden chair, arms folded on top of the back of the chair, his chin resting on them. His eyes are closed and his face seems tense with concentration or effort.

By his feet there’s an opened cardboard box of what Jack recognizes to be Arkanian plasma magazines. Torchwood has stopped using these a while back, for safety issues. The fuel cells inside the magazines are highly unstable, and Jack can recall more than one occasion where a clumsy operative caused a minor explosion while attempting to change the magazine in an Arkanian plasma gun.

On a small wooden table before Ianto, rests one of the magazines, its top cracked open. As Jack watches, a little amazed, a fuel cell the size of a small marble comes floating out of the magazine. It rises up and then moves away from Ianto, towards the target sheet. Jack notices a dozen identical cells, suspended in mid air a small distance from the sheet. The recent addition stops in the same location, and Jack realizes that they form a slowly rotating circle. Another cell leaves the magazine, the last one, by Jack’s count, and joins the circle as well.

Ianto shifts a little on the chair and takes a deep breath. Jack finds that he’s almost afraid to breathe, so as not to distract the other man. Ianto’s right hand clenches on the back of the chair, knuckles turning white, and he makes a small sound of effort.

A cell shoots from the slowly rotating circle towards the target sheet. As it touches the paper, it explodes in a pulse of energy, leaving a large scorch mark. The sound ricochets off the walls, not quite as loud as a gunshot.

Ianto shifts again, and Jack can see he’s breathing faster now. Another cell shoots out of the circle, another small explosion, and then there’s a gasp from Ianto, and the remaining circling cells waver. Jack tenses as, for a moment, it looks as if the cells are about to fall to the ground, but then they disintegrate in a series of quick muffled implosions.    

Ianto opens his eyes and glares at the target sheet in frustration, still catching his breath. After a moment he brings a hand up and rubs the bridge of his nose between his thumb and forefinger, eyes closing again. “Was there something you needed?” he asks quietly.

Jack shifts a little. When Ianto turns to look at him he clears his throat. “I didn’t mean to interrupt. There’s… food upstairs. I just thought you might be hungry.”

Ianto’s eyes soften somewhat, and he nods, then runs a hand through his hair. “Sure, let me clean up in here, and I’ll be right up.”

Jack sends him a hesitant smile. “I’ll… go look for some plates.”    

 ***

Ianto can recognize an apology when he sees one. Jack’s version is a non-verbal one, but it brings the message across loud and clear.

One end of the conference room table is set for two, complete with cloth napkins, a bottle of Chianti and two sparkling glasses, and Ianto notes the logo of his favourite Italian restaurant on the takeout boxes. He doesn’t recognize the song playing softly in the background - it sounds like one of Jack’s classics, from long before Ianto was even born. 

Jack turns away from the audio system when Ianto steps into the room, and sends him a nervous smile.

Ianto returns it and raises an eyebrow as he finishes scanning the table. “If there’s a wild mushroom risotto in one of these boxes, I may end up proposing marriage,” he says lightly.

Jack chuckles and shakes his head. “I’m not telling,” he answers. “Discover for yourself.”

Ianto grins and goes to sit down. Jack picks up the opened wine bottle and pours into the two glasses, before settling down himself.

“I had a friend once, long ago,” Jack starts as he reaches for the first box of food, “who was telekinetic. I used to help her practice — we’d play games, one was a little like table tennis, and there was one with darts and a three-dimensional target. I played them the old fashioned way, obviously, but she used just her mind.”

“Who won?” Ianto asks. He’s found the box with the risotto and was transferring some onto his plate.

“She did, naturally. It was hardly a fair competition. Also, I kind of let her, but my point is…” Jack looks up from his plate, serious now. “If you want, I can help you, too. You looked like you weren’t doing too badly by yourself down there, but if you ever want company…” he trails off.

Ianto swallows. After the cool welcome he’d received from Jack two days ago, he hadn’t dared hope for such an offer. He almost doesn’t know how to react to this sudden change in attitude. “I’d like that,” he says a little hoarsely.

Jack seems happy with his reply. “Is the risotto as good as you expected?” 

Ianto is only now taking his first bite, and he’s not disappointed. “Better,” he says with a smile. “Thanks for remembering.”

Jack nods, and they eat in silence for a few minutes.

A slow, quiet song comes on. It sounds vaguely familiar to Ianto, but he can’t recall the name or the artist.  It turns Jack’s expression solemn, for some reason, and he leans back in his chair, reaching for the wine.

The lyrics speak of a love found then lost, as they often do in songs from that era — or, Ianto thinks, from any era, really — but for some reason Ianto finds the melody soothing rather than sad. 

“You haven’t done anything wrong.” Jack’s words are abrupt, and yet at the same time hesitant. “If I came off, in the last couple of days, as… well. Whatever issues there were… they were my own. I’ve… sorted them out,” he says mostly into the wine glass he’s holding.

Ianto puts down his fork and knife carefully and stares at Jack. That little stuttered speech is more unsettling to him than anything Jack has said or done in the last forty eight hours. The fact that Jack was not looking at him while he gave it is particularly unnerving.

He chooses his words carefully before he replies. “If there is something that you know, that concerns me …” he starts, and when Jack looks up, startled, he keeps his eyes very firmly trained on his, “then I think you should tell me what it is.”

Jack’s hand is a little unsteady as he sets down his wine glass. His face grows pale, but he doesn’t look away.

Ianto continues in that same controlled tone, trying to broadcast a sense of calm that he’s not really feeling. ”If you think you cannot tell me, for some reason, then I’d rather you tell me that, rather than lie to me.”

Ianto’s not quite prepared for the amount of pain he sees in Jack’s eyes.

The silence stretches for a long, endless moment, before Jack lets out a long breath and opens his mouth.

***

“Get a body bag, will you? I’ll make sure it’s safe,” Jack tells Lilly once they exit the old house. He turns towards the field as she heads back to the car.

Even from a distance he can tell the alien is still alive; the shallow, rapid rise and fall of the chest changing the light reflected off the bio-suit. The thing’s arm twitches as the hand presses against the bleeding bullet hole in the neck.

Jack pulls out and cocks his gun as he slowly comes closer. He can’t rule out the possibility that the alien is still dangerous. As he takes the final few steps, he keeps the gun trained on its head. He can hear it wheezing - the awful, arrhythmic gurgling sound of a dying creature.  As Jack’s shadow falls on it, it turns its head towards him, but Jack can only imagine the face behind the mirror-like visor of the bio-suit.

“Where and when did you come from?” Jack murmurs, not really expecting an answer.

There’s a hitch in the wheezing, and the alien makes a sound. It’s unintelligible, at first, but then it tries again.

“Ja… aa… ack.”

Jack shakes his head lightly, positive he misinterpreted. The alien makes another gurgling noise, and fresh dark-red blood gushes out from between the fingers clamped over the neck.

The gun in Jack’s hand turns suddenly scalding hot, and he drops it with a hiss. On the ground, the alien twitches again, and suddenly the air crackles with electricity. Jack takes a step back, and another, and then there’s a blinding flash of light and the body on the ground bursts into flames.

The heat is so intense that Jack has to shield his face and turn away from the fire. He sees Lilly running towards him, a body bag clutched in her hand. Her eyes are wide as she takes in the bright flames.

“What happened?!”

Jack shakes his head in confusion. “Spontaneous combustion…?” he suggests.

Behind him, the flames are already beginning to diminish. When the heat becomes more or less bearable, Jack approaches the remains, squinting through the smoke. Where an alien once lay, now was only a small pile of ash over charred ground.

He hears Lilly on the radio behind him.

“Williams, you there?”

The radio crackles. “Go ahead.”

“There seem to have been a sort of self-destruct mechanism integrated into the suit. There’s not a lot to bring back.”

“Self destruct? Are you sure? It doesn’t correspond to the data we have for that species.” 

“I’m pretty damn sure. I’m standing in front of a pile of ash.”

There’s a pause, then another crackle. “Doesn’t matter. Get a sample if you can, we’ll make an analysis.”

Lilly huffs, and comes to stand besides Jack. “Well. That was a little creepy,” she offers.

Jack shrugs, still not quite able to tear his eyes away from the scorch marks. There’s a feeling of cold dread in the pit of his stomach that he can’t even begin to explain.

***

 “I can’t.” It’s almost a whisper. Jack looks away, clears his throat. “I can’t tell you. Please don’t ask me…”  He keeps his eyes trained on the corner of the table, and tries to swallow past the lump in his throat.

There’s a rustle of clothing, the scrape of a chair moving as Ianto stands up. Jack looks up at the movement, and his eyes follow Ianto as he walks around the table towards him. Ianto’s face is the picture of calm as he extends a hand.

Somewhat wearily, Jack takes it, and at Ianto’s gentle tug he obediently stands up. They move a few steps away from the table, and then Ianto draws close, sliding both hands around Jack’s waist and pulling him against his body.

“Okay,” Ianto says simply. He lets his cheek rub against Jack’s, and his lips brush just slightly against Jack’s ear as he adds, “I won’t ask again.”

Jack’s breath stutters a little, relief and pain washing over him in waves. He realizes that he’s standing like a statue in Ianto’s arms, stiff and tense. He lets out a long, shuddering sigh, and slowly allows his surroundings to penetrate his mind again. Awareness trickles in, one detail at a time. The heat radiating from Ianto’s body, his scent, the warm, pleasant lighting in the room, and the soft music playing in the background. Slowly, gradually, Jack melts into the embrace, pressing his cheek against Ianto a little, taking comfort in the contact.

“Will you stay here, with me, tonight?” Jack asks quietly.

For a moment, there’s no response, just a momentary tightening of Ianto’s arms around him. Then there’s the swell of Ianto’s chest as he breathes in deeply, and then the warm puff of air against his ear as he replies, “There’s nowhere else I’d rather be.”




End.
 





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[identity profile] weaselett.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 04:20 pm (UTC)(link)
wow - love this fic (and the prologue fic) - it's all so cleverly worked out and the characters all ring true. It's well written and just really good :)(does he actually die or....? *wants to know*)

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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:29 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much! (And I'm leaving that up to you...)

[identity profile] doctorinchains.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 04:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, that was really, really interesting and compelling! I feel so sad for the two of them.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:30 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks! :)

[identity profile] hazelayes.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 04:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh Lor' the dinner's late AGAIN! I just had to finish your wonderful story :) Seriously loving the way it gripped me and gave me images of X-man!Ianto. Such a sad kind of ending, but I guess it was expected. It is Torchwood after all.:o/
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:32 am (UTC)(link)
LOL! In my home we call it "NewFic/TV Dinner night" :P

Glad you liked it!

[identity profile] emyrldlady.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 05:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Brilliant and tormenting!
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:32 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks!

[identity profile] favoritedarknes.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 06:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, I really loved this and now I want to know what Jack knows :-D
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:32 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks :)
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[identity profile] angstosaur.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 07:59 pm (UTC)(link)
oh dear - how tragic ... poor Jack, knowing what he knows and not being able to change a thing, no wonder he was so tormented and unable to face Ianto ...

gorgeously written flicking from one time to the next ... reminiscent of The Time Traveller's Wife ... very clever fic, well done :-)
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:33 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I appreciate it :)

[identity profile] flowright.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 09:03 pm (UTC)(link)
EPIC!fic is EPIC.

Oh boy... what can I say, you know how to write bleak sense of doom.
I love your plot and the clever way the story is ouroboros-ing us.
My face may be stuck in a D: position for quite sometimes now but I would like to read it again or you know more of new fics from you ;)

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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:34 am (UTC)(link)
Bleak Sense of Doom is my motto in life. :P
Thank you!
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[identity profile] fide-et-spe.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 10:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh dear, how sad. Bloody Hell. I don't know why but I didn't expect this. Gosh. Anyhow really wonderful, I had loved that fix it, so this was great, but you know, terribly sad.

I really loved the plottiness, and all the detail, such as the class and Barcelona.

By the way, 16 isn't under age, you don't need to warn for that. I think I missed the warning for one's heart being a bit broken by the story though.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:37 am (UTC)(link)
I'm glad you liked it and sorry it broke your heart... I rarely do happy endings, but I realize that this one kinda horrible, even for me.

I wasn't sure about the age of consent in the US, so I tried to be on the safe side.

Thanks for commenting!

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[identity profile] sarituss.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 10:36 pm (UTC)(link)
What!? That's the end! NOOOO!!! *crying*
I don't want him to die, no, no, no, no, no... *shakes head in denial*

Great fic, and plot... :D <3
I just wished for a happy ending... *sniff*
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:40 am (UTC)(link)
Take a deep breath. Now think of how much sex Jack and Ianto can have between the end of the story and the time Ianto actually dies. Makes up for it, don't you think?

Thanks for the feedback! :D

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[identity profile] seether-79.livejournal.com 2009-10-07 11:31 pm (UTC)(link)
This was pure win!! wonderful fic... will there be a sequal? PLEASE ♥
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:41 am (UTC)(link)
There's always a chance ;)

Thanks!

[identity profile] felmyst.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 12:54 am (UTC)(link)
That was one of the best fics I have read in a while. I really thought your characterizations were excellent and the mysterous ending...loved it..sequel?
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 03:08 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you, I'm glad you liked :)

[identity profile] kel-reiley.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 02:57 am (UTC)(link)
*wibbles* oh, i love it, the predestination and wonky time-travel! though i was so, so hoping it wasn't going to be what i thought it was going to be!
*cries*
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 03:17 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, sorry, he was doomed from the start... Of course, I wrote this originally before CoE and now it all seems a bit pointless (why bother writing a fix-it and bringing Ianto back if I'm just going to kill him again, right?). Oh, well...

I'm happy you liked it, and thanks for the feedback! :)
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[identity profile] lone-star-woman.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 04:40 am (UTC)(link)
Well, break my heart, why don't you? but it was well-written, and Ianto did get a better death than he did in CoE. I want to hug Jack now.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 02:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Me too ;) Thanks!

[identity profile] jedirita.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 04:45 am (UTC)(link)
o_O

Wow. Amazing.

Wish I could say more, but I'm still reeling from the emotional impact. Suxx to be Jack! But not so much to be Ianto. :D
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 02:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you :)

[identity profile] eumelia.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 09:12 am (UTC)(link)
Plots and Paradoxes and Pain, Oh My!

That was a great ride, brilliant pulp sci-fi and the drama we all love, adore and seek in Torchwood.

Jack always pays the price, doesn't he, he being in every time. The ending is gut wrenching and Ianto being a meta-human(post-human?) suits him so... we all want the boy to be as speshul as we think he is.

Brilliant. Lovely.

More?
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 02:20 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. Ianto IS special; Genius, immortal, Time-Lord or super-human - he is what we write him to be ;)
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[identity profile] temporal-witch.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 10:35 am (UTC)(link)
I cannot tell you how much I loved this fic. I reread the prequel fix-it, which was delightfully well-written and exquisitely-plotted. Your characterisation is heartbreakingly spot-on. This one is just...my words fail me. I really hurt for Jack, knowing he's to be the one that eventually kills Ianto in his past, when he knew no better. It's clearly one of those cases in which knowing too much about one's future / past can tear one up inside.

Thank you for writing this. I've friended you - I hope you don't mind. I would like to know when you update so I can follow your brilliant fics!

So - just gorgeous and utterly breathtaking. I love me some good Torchwood fic, and that ain't easy to find!
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 02:27 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much for the wonderful feedback, and I've friended you back. I think that back when I first came up with this I couldn't think of a more fitting and gruesome death for Ianto - dying by Jack's hand. Then, of course, came his canon death, and changed my entire view (now I just want to see him live forever...).

[identity profile] cupidsbow.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 04:03 pm (UTC)(link)
What a great story! Thanks for sharing.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 07:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :)

[identity profile] elainasaunt.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 04:15 pm (UTC)(link)
Of course I had to reread the prequel before starting on this, and it was good to be reminded what a great fix-it that is. I really like this as well, despite Ianto's eventual and inevitable death. Well, I don't generally have a whole lot of life-altering trauma over the death of fictional characters, no matter how sad I may feel at the time. (They're fictional! I can bring them back to life whenever I want!) That being said, I found myself speculating about who Williams was and why the security level was so high when the Red Alpha humanoid came through the Rift, and whether it wasn't possible to finesse another timey-wimey escape for our favourite Welshman.

Have you read Freakangels (http://www.freakangels.com/)?* What we know so far of their backstory (inspired by The Midwich Cuckoos) sounds rather like the origins of Ianto's powers. Even if there's no way to engineer an escape for him without ending the universe, I'd love to see his powers explored in further fics from you. After all, Ianto is young, and so is the 21st Century.

*Warning, warning: severe danger of uncontrollable Archive Bingeing.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 08:06 pm (UTC)(link)
For me CoE was the first case of "life-altering trauma over the death of fictional characters", and that was despite the fact the I knew very well that I can bring him back whenever I want (which I did). I'm happy to say, though, that I'm pretty sure it was also the last. The only characters I'm ever allowing myself to get this attached to will be my own original characters (stay tuned for when my original TV series gets picked up).

As for this fic, I'm always trying to leave "wriggle space" and open options :)

I must say I've never heard of Freakangles, but you certainly have me intrigued and I'm going to explore...

I'm really glad you enjoyed reading, and thanks for the feedback!

[identity profile] neifile7.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 05:42 pm (UTC)(link)
What an engaging, amazing ride. I'm not a huge fan of super!Ianto stories, but I did like the different "stages" you took us through with him (the bit about the negative spike and Roland near the end was very nicely done -- lets the reader fill in the blanks beautifully). Also, the first-time scene was very moving and plausible; younger-Ianto-shags-Jack is another fandom trope seldom done this well. By all means give us more -- this is resolved enough not to call for a sequel of any kind, but you have a knack for the timey-wimey, and perhaps you'll indulge us with similar tales?
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 08:28 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you for riding with us ;)

I also feel that this ending has a good impact, and I think that a sequel will just take away from that. However, Timey-wimey does seem to be my thing lately, so I may be writing along these lines in the future.

I appreciate the feedback!

Timey-wimey FTW!

[identity profile] specialj67.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 08:13 pm (UTC)(link)
I loved this because it was a fix-it in the way I like fix-its: Ianto doesn't die in that kinda sucky was he did in canon but is still doomed nonetheless. Just in a slightly more epic, but still believable, way. ;)

I enjoyed the mounting sense of dread of the last few chapters after Ianto gets back and everything is still not copacetic. Wishing things would work out all rainbows and bunnies-like but knowing that this is Torchwood and good luck with that, sister. Sometimes things are just not meant to end well or happily and when it's written well, like this, makes it feel just as fulfilling and right as something romantical. If that makes sense. I just feel so bad/sad for Jack for reading the effing history book because he couldn't help himself and for Ianto for knowing that Jack knows what's going to happen to him but not pushing it for Jack's sake.

Oh the angst! I want to drizzle it like honey over a warm croissant and savor it!

Good stuff.
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Re: Timey-wimey FTW!

[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-09 02:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh the angst! I want to drizzle it like honey over a warm croissant and savor it!

mmm... yummy... LOL!

Yeah, I'm a sucker for angst and doom... but I think it didn't end in an entirely hopeless way.

I'm really glad you liked it, and thanks for the wonderful feedback!

Götterdämmerung

[identity profile] caledonius72.livejournal.com 2009-10-08 10:28 pm (UTC)(link)
The term Götterdämmerung is occasionally used in English, referring to a disastrous conclusion of events <-- from wikipedia.

Wow - I don't normally read this kind of fic, but fide-et-spe recommended it to me. Brilliantly done, a lightness of touch and that building of events that no-one has control over, and not a hurtling to a conclusion, but a slow, sure and steady path.

"I am Ianto Jones, and this is how I roll" - he's wonderful in this, so much making peace with his past, and looking to a future which he has something very important to do, and doesn't shy away from it, but accepts it and just gets on with living his life the best way he can - and refusing to put up with Jack's shit but also accepting Jack's explanation - such trust and love and deep understanding.

Doom is in the job description with Torchwood, but what I love about this story is, yes, our hero dies, but will have had a long and full life, and dies having saved the earth. Many more adventures for the Captain and the Tea Boy between the now and the then.

Jack, oh Jack. My heart breaks for you. You killed the man you love, and you didn't know it. Being your stoopid self, and reading that damn book... urk! Why can't you do as you're damn well told!!!!

Cursed by knowing the future, and also doubly cursed by knowing that when Ianto heads off to save the earth, you will never see him again. But still willing to help Ianto hone his skills, to be with him - a noble act. Jack you ARE bigger on the inside. The agony of the knowledge this for the next few decades; what a weight to carry, and what a factor which will bear on their relationship - can Jack or Jack and Ianto's relationship bear that pressure?

Thank you - I've rambled on enough now!
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Re: Götterdämmerung

[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-09 02:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much and please - be my guest and ramble away, I'm enjoying every second :D

Götterdämmerung is an excellent word, I just might adopt it. I don't usually write such horrible endings, but I find that lately doom and destruction motivate and inspire me more than romance or even sex.

I tried to emphasize how dysfunctional Jack and Ianto's relationship is, their way of dealing without actually dealing - and I'm glad that worked for you.

wow

[identity profile] breannarose1.livejournal.com 2009-10-09 02:00 am (UTC)(link)
the words "oh, s*t!" was my 1st reaction to this.
my second: that was a great story.
Thanks for it! :)
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Re: wow

[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-09 03:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :D

[identity profile] nancybrown.livejournal.com 2009-10-09 02:20 am (UTC)(link)
That was really excellent. I love the use of the timelines, and how the story saw its end even before the beginning in a way. Great pacing, great character work, just fantastic all around.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-09 03:05 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much!

I love the use of the timelines, and how the story saw its end even before the beginning in a way.

That's an interesting way of putting it. I remember when I wrote that line that Ianto says to Jack: "This was decided for me before I was even born", and what I though was, Ianto, you don't know the half of it, because in a way - Ianto died before he was born in this story. Anyway, I'm glad it worked for you! :)
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[personal profile] hope 2009-10-11 03:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, ouch! But brilliant. Thanks for a great read.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-12 04:20 pm (UTC)(link)
:D Thank you

[identity profile] freekydj.livejournal.com 2009-10-13 05:12 pm (UTC)(link)
This is the first fic of yours & I loved it. The end is just heartbreaking. Even if Ianto grows old first, the memories of the past must be awful for Jack.
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[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-10-14 07:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

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